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Post by spy6koko on May 11, 2011 22:34:24 GMT -5
thats realy good, and i like how u used correct punctuation and capitolization (my spelling sux so srry) but u could hav used more detels, so ur over all grade is an A-
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Post by Ronnie on Oct 24, 2011 12:50:15 GMT -5
Not everyone knew about the stables, everyone though immediatly about horses or beautiful ponnies and stuff, poor new-bies, as a junior i discovered once about them... ok, i have to admit it, my first time i also though about just STABLES it all started when dad saw them and asked the headmistress to bring my horse (yes, i DO have a horse), i was happy cuz Patronum is more than a horse to me, he will be my only friend in the Academy, at least before i met someone nice, anyrode...
it was like my third day of school, and i went to the stables to feed Patronum, but something called my attention, there was a girl , a sophomore, entering to a stall next to where my horse was, but when a checked SHE WAS GONE, first lesson I learned at the academy: "nothing is impossible" so i entered too... not of my brightest ideas EVER I discovered why they build a complete new stall just for Patronum and insisted in never changing him of stall because the other where "taken" even though he was the only living being in there.
The next thing i knew was that i was in what seemed to be a subway, a very scary one.
Continue......
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Post by Agent MeowMeow on Feb 5, 2012 19:56:52 GMT -5
I was on my way to the stables to feed Valentine my horse, when i noticed something odd. A flower growing from a haystack! I went toward the haystack, and as i was pushing through the haystacks i fell into some sort of hole. I was screaming for help but i couldn't find my voice. Then i landed into water. I landed into the swimming pool.
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Post by spy6koko on Mar 5, 2012 17:50:01 GMT -5
ronnie- B- ur story was good, but u should hav had more stuff about the secret passages. and it was supposed to b a short story, so the "continue" killed ya. agent lucy- C- it was a little to short, not enough detels, and kinda all over the place... if u would like to get a better grade u get 1 redo
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Post by Agent MeowMeow on Mar 5, 2012 18:00:21 GMT -5
aww.
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Post by spy6koko on Mar 5, 2012 21:30:54 GMT -5
swwy u can always try again
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Post by Agent MeowMeow on Mar 17, 2012 13:47:41 GMT -5
I cant think of anything things else...LOL!
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Post by spy6koko on Mar 20, 2012 22:34:24 GMT -5
lol, im swwy
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Post by roseheart42 on Mar 30, 2012 13:41:13 GMT -5
I know I'm a bit late, but...
I was trying to study in my room, but people outside kept shrieking and giggling. I decided a better place to study would be in the stables - they were always so quiet. I took my stuff down there and settled down to study on a haystack. The next thing I knew, I'd fallen down a hole with a secret passage in front. I followed it, out of curiosity and I came to a door. I tried to open it, but it seemed to be stuck. I pushed really hard and eventually it opened. There was a small room, with an ancient table and chair. On the table there was a drawing. It looked like some sort of necklace, but the drawing wasn't finished. Beneath it there was a map... but I never saw what the map said, because I noticed another door on the other side of the room from the one I came in by. It was opening! I ran back the way I came, but the next time I went down, the drawing and map were gone...
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Post by spy6koko on Mar 31, 2012 15:11:49 GMT -5
thats really good! i love how it leavs u thinkin, so ur grade would hav to b an A+!!!!! which also means u get to pic the next topic that everyone gets to write about! congrates
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Post by Agent MeowMeow on Apr 29, 2012 17:00:19 GMT -5
Ima try again.
I was going to go to my horse, when i hear a noise...i think its from the haystacks. So i go to the haystacks, and see a mouse. I sigh and go back to my horse, when suddenly i fall into a hole. I scream and fall into what looks like the sewer. I go through the tunnels hoping to find a way out. When i reach the end however, i hear some voices, so i hide and listen to...the man who is trying to destroy the Gallagher Academy.
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Post by spy6koko on May 3, 2012 10:34:13 GMT -5
Good but kinda all over... I'm not tryin to b mean... but ur grade is a C+
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Post by Agent MeowMeow on May 3, 2012 14:15:42 GMT -5
I give up koko.
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Post by spy6koko on May 5, 2012 20:34:46 GMT -5
Srry :-\
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Post by Agent MeowMeow on May 7, 2012 14:37:29 GMT -5
whateverrr.
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