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Post by spy6koko on Apr 16, 2011 17:26:30 GMT -5
wt better cover then stables!!!!! i mean seriously, u think of horses wen u think of stables. i highly dout u think of top secret passages wen u think of stables. thats y nobody (even the students) suspect anything weird from the stables .... to bad that nobody knows that the best passages r in the stables!!!!!
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 16, 2011 18:22:03 GMT -5
this is the newest writing class... here u need to write a short strory that well go with the topic given above... and in 1 week i will grade them all and giv everyone who wrote a short story a grade, and the winner of the best story will get to chose the next topic the class has to write about!!!!
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Post by Agent Bex on Apr 16, 2011 21:31:26 GMT -5
I was walking through the stables one day. When I twisted my ankle, so I sat down on a hay roll. When I did the top fell out and I was dumped in a secret tunnel. I tried to get back out the way I came, but alas the door wouldn't budge. So I decided I sould try and walk to see if there was another way out so I set off. I walk for about ten minutes and there was a dead end. So I pushed on it and I came out outside the gates of the school, and had to sneek back in.
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 16, 2011 21:39:03 GMT -5
thats realy good.. but ill hav to giv u an A- bc the end was a little flat, but other then that its good
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Post by Agent Bex on Apr 16, 2011 21:54:09 GMT -5
thanks I suck at writing mabye latter I will try again
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 16, 2011 22:00:14 GMT -5
u only get 1 retry
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Post by Agent Bex on Apr 16, 2011 22:05:42 GMT -5
yes I am just going to add a ending to whay I have now
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 16, 2011 22:08:19 GMT -5
ok so revise it... then ill regrade
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Post by Agent Bex on Apr 16, 2011 22:10:34 GMT -5
I was walking through the stables one day. When I twisted my ankle, so I sat down on a hay roll. When I did the top fell out and I was dumped in a secret tunnel. I tried to get back out the way I came, but alas the door wouldn't budge. So I decided I sould try and walk to see if there was another way out so I set off. I walk for about ten minutes and there was a dead end. So I pushed on it and I came out outside the gates of the school, and had to sneek back in. So when I tried the wall climbing I fell tring to doge a camra. So I tried another after another then I thought mabye I could take a gaurde down so I went to try. I say bubble gum gaurd and knew that was my best shot. I walk along the wall and whisled when he turned I kicked him in the face and slapped a patch on him and ran in. When I got in I ran to my next class and told my friends. So we always go to the barn and find new passages.
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 16, 2011 22:31:08 GMT -5
A+ that was realy good, i liked how u used things from the gg books
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Post by Agent Bex on Apr 16, 2011 23:00:17 GMT -5
thank you ;D I just had to add the bubble guard
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 19, 2011 2:15:02 GMT -5
here is an example short story....
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Post by spy6koko on Apr 19, 2011 2:29:16 GMT -5
after our new teacher, solomon, gave his 1st lesson, i couldnt help but think he was saying it was my dads fault that he never came back. so instead of crying infront of my sisters, i ran as fast as posible to the stables. i found this dark corner that was perfectly cushened with hay. so i just sat there untle i felt this weird lump under all the hay. so i scooted the hay from the lump, and saw our skools simble (logo) so i pushed on it. and it opened up a hidden passage way. one im super sure even gilly herself had never even fowned. so of course being the chameleon i am, i went to c where it lead. i hav no clue how long i was down there, but im pretty sure wen i came out though this small hole, i was in sublevel 3!!!!!!!!! all i no is that where ever i was, i was pretty sure that i wasnt suposed to b there. so i went back where i had come. now i hav to deside wether or not i should tell my roomies.
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Post by Agent Cammie on May 7, 2011 10:21:47 GMT -5
One day I was just roaming around with my friends when i decided i wanted to check out the stables. MY friends didn't want to, so i told them I'd meet them later. I thought there would be horses, but when i got there, there was nobody or any animals there except for me. I went in one of the stables and sat down. Then all of a sudden i stumbled backwards and hit my head. I wasn't bleeding but i had a large bump. It was dark and I couldn't see, luckily for me I always carry around a small flashlight. I turned it on and explored the tunnels. When I thought there was a dead end a sat down and again stumbled back. This time it was bright, and right there looking down on me was the principal. "where did you come from?" She asked. "I uh...I was just..." I couldn't think of anything and ran as fast as I could to my room., only to find my friends siting in the room. "Where were you we've been worried sick. We were almost going to tell the principal you were gone!" said one of my friends. "It's a long story." I told them THE END(I added the end because otherwise the dialog wouldn't sound right for an ending)
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Post by Agent Cammie on May 7, 2011 10:23:33 GMT -5
the my in the second line isn't supposed to be capitol and after as fast as i could to my room there's only supposed to be a comma
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